 steffxnie 2009-10-13 . chapter 1I like the way you express your feelings through the family table. The metaphors are quite fitting.
I like theses lines best: 'or is guilt rising up my throat?' and 'Away from them, I’ll be okay. If I didn’t have enough,There'll be leftovers the next day.'
Many things in this poem are relatable and are associated. The rhyming is also very natural. Your words are well expressed. Nicely done. It's a lovely poem. |