this story is good, i like it
but there history is confusing.
did they both admit their feelings to each other when they were younger?
and how did there friendship stop?

like it (: the character is pretty interesting, what with her competitiveness and all. keep writing! XD

Yay! You're back ^^ With another awesome story! Liked it a lot!

no I think it works as is. oh and because i am a lazy bum I can't be bothered to go on about how much I liked it.
PS my top has polka-dots.

It was different! Way different.. I think it was great.. Maybe a slightly different end.. but i can't picture it. :)

Sukanya

LOL have i told you you're amazing ;D

"Unlike me; tall and flat, like road kill."

Loves it!

NO! I think I like it as it is. This story shows maturity in your writing, both the plot and the language as well. Loved how the story was based on a past event but you didn't dwell on it. No "flashbacks" or awkward "here's a re-cap of what happened". It made me even more curious to know what the heck happened six years ago and you divulged enough to satisfy my curiosity without sounding lame.

Also, very nice character development. But grammar wise, I think you may have forgotten a word and punctuation or two, not a big deal because they're not noticeable.

I think that originally it came out as more than a one shot, perhaps a two shot. I love the characters, but if you feel that is missing something i would think it would be more details about her feelings and perhaps explaining a bit more why he left. LOVED IT, Amazing just like your other stories, They really are cute together, muscles! :) good luck with school and happy writings!

Aw! I loved it. :) So so cute...j'adore.

such a great story and soo cute lol
completely loved this oneshot :)
aand i like it as it is lol a great way to end it :D

Yay new story!
I like the "I can do everything you can do better" thing between them. =]

AW! Again, I absolutely adore your work!

If I had power over all of the world, I would keep you in my fabulous castle and make you write for me - homework and school be damned.

In fact, if I ruled the world, there wouldn't be any homework...

Gah, can't wait to read some more of your work!!

Lyra
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P.S. I think this is awesome as is :P

This one felt a lot different from your other pieces...still good though! ;)

And are you doing NaNoWriMo? If you are, make sure you add me as a buddy? (Username: Ravina!)

- Rebekah

Completely and totally LOVED this!! And oh my god, NaNoWriMo already!? I completely forgot!
Awesome story, loved it to pieces :D
-Aria

haha love it. great story!