In a way, this is very good. It is strong, from what I've seen from your poetry. You've improved a lot.

Be careful though, "this bloody rain" - in a way, this is very good imagery, but there is another side to it as well and do you mean it the other way too? If not, then see if you can reword it. Also, "seeds" also give another kind of connation that you might not want in this poem.

Otherwise, wonderful job! and glad to see you're back writing!
Narq