WO! So I've already ready this, lmao. You sent it to me, and now I remember it. I really like it though. I can't wait to actually read the chapters! How fun!! It was dark and deep and I liked it. Good job, good hook. I really like when her personality comes through, like when she says, "I'm looking for a way out. Not in the same way, of course, so I guess 'out' really isn't the right word. Don't get all panicky on me, okay? I'm not thinking like that." That's cool. YAY PROLOGUES!

Absouletly breathlessly written. I loved they emotions and the fact the character is so real. People can sympathieses with needing help having something to put there pain or secrets of life in. I can't wait to read more. I hope you feel inspired to write more.

sincerly,
VampiresTears XD -> happiness of good stories

Mm, I suppose Kelsie is writing in her journal..correct?
I like the fact that you didn't give away the inner-turmoil that Kelsie was facing;
it makes me curious as to what it is, and it makes me want to read even longer.

I like the fact that you put the prolouge as well, and left it as a sort-of cliff hanger.

Or did you not mean to do that...?

Anyways, good job :)

I can't wait to read more about this pain she is stricken with and how she handles it;
I also can't wait to learn more about the main character !

--Ansleyy!