 BlackRoseThorn 2009-12-02 . chapter 1very comforting, loved it. |
 letyoursoultakeflight 2009-11-02 . chapter 1Aww, I dont know what to think of this! In some ways it's sad and in other ways its bitter and in other ways its more about freedom from someone one never had anything i common with... whatever the case, I like it! |
 PancakesAndCoffee 2009-10-21 . chapter 1I loved the switch of "me" and "you" in the first stanza and the fact that it continues throughout the whole poem. This line was especially powerful:
Despite not my forgetful smile:
For once, it is true.
Glad to see you're still on FP! You've been keeping it up for such a long time now.
One thing - did you mean "though bright" instead of "thought"? That seems to make more sense to me. |
 East-0f-Eden 2009-10-21 . chapter 1I can see your Christina Rossetti in this poem. It has that forlorn/happy/love that her Song poem does. It's beautiful I loved the sky part. This is just a weird idea. But, in your profile you say you grew up in China? Maybe it was Japan? Could you write a poem or two about growing up there? It's just a request but if your muse isn't insprired by the topic (the muses are very hard to please sometimes aren't they?) then don't bother. :)
~EOE |
 Mirabella 2009-10-19 . chapter 1Adore not the roses
I outgrew -
Love it! Amazing. :) |
 Erlkoenigin 2009-10-19 . chapter 1This sounds like a song.
I especially like the last line "Despise not my forgetful smile:For once, it is true." |
 kloun mannequin 2009-10-19 . chapter 1I really this, it's as if they were by separated ways. |