Oh, this is lovely. I'm not sure what to say that hasn't already been said by the other reviewers, but I really enjoyed this. The flow was excellent, it didn't seem choppy or awkward anywhere. The poetic imagery was wonderful too. The first stanza was a powerful opening, but my favorite parts are the 2nd and 3rd stanzas.

Wonderful poem, please keep writing! :) I'll definitely read some of your other work too.

The third stanza is wonderful and is my favorite!
I like the little hints of rhyming found in parts of this, nicely done. This was filled with lovely descriptions and imagery that left me feeling just amazed.
"unworthy i may be,
i still hope that
to be with you is
my destiny."
I felt I could really connect with these lines.
This piece was very well written :)

"And render you broken." I love the passion here - it's mind-blowing and regal.

"The heartless look so beautiful in the twilight." Good God, the tone of this line is phenomenal. :)

"The silence plays a tune reminding me of melancholic illusions and dreams intertwined in the horizon." I love this part. I could relate to it. I've seen that dream-rise before.

"I'd gladly destroy myself." I like that you chose the word 'destroy' and not 'kill.' It's interesting to ponder all the ways in which we can 'destroy' ourselves, both physically and spiritually.

"Then I'd belive in you still." Stunning.