Wow, this is definitely action packed! My mind is absolutely reeling with everything that went on here. I'm probably going to end up reading it about five times, just to absorb everything. At any rate... I love it. You write battle scenes really, really well. I can actually see everything you describe in my mind, which is totally awesome. And I like the decision to go with Nathaniel's POV in this! I think the whole story is going to be ten times fuller and richer with you switching between the three brothers. (Just a thought, but it may even add another layer of depth to write a chapter or two from other perspectives, such as Damone's POV or Ashiel's... it would be a challenge, but it would be extremely engaging, I think) I think it's actually a good thing that things aren't explained right away, because it keeps us readers on our toes, ya know? And your description of Ashiel gave me chills, seriously. Oh, and I find it extremely interesting that Demitri could have cast Damone's spirit out of the man, but refused to do so. He's actually so consumed with guilt that he refuses to even speak the name of Christ? That absolutely makes my heart hurt for him! That's very telling about his character... I just can't wait to read more! Lol, every chapter you write makes me just want to read more and more! Oh, and I love Nathaniel's powers! Totally awesome, I mean, him fighting with God's creation of nature is so cool. Good job on that, seriously! Everything's described really really well. Great chapter hun!
Love in Christ,
Lyn

Oh, wow, that's a terrible cliffhanger! Very cruel of you =) At any rate... I'm very impressed. You write action as well as you write emotion (a rarity, I must say). I love that we're getting a real plot, now. I'm guessing that Demitri has one of these Orbs in his lair? And that it would be an extremely bad thing if the evil fallen find these Orbs? Yeah, and if Demitri dies I'm sincerely going to cry. Sincerely. I really really loved the line near the end: "Words cannot describe the terror that gripped me in that moment; it grasped me like the cold water of the Arctic Ocean, so real I could taste the salt." That puts an incredible image in the readers mind. And Damone is creepy... and just plain gives me chills- not the good kind either. Great chapter!!
Love in Christ,
Lyny

Okay, so I mostly already told you how much I love this, but I wanted to reiterate it by sending a review =) I think it's incredible the way you describe the remorse that Demitri feels, seriously. I wasn't kidding when I said that it had me on the verge of tears. And I really love the way you describe Demitri and Nathaniel's natural forms. I can just picture them in my mind's eye. Seriously great job on this!
Love in Christ!!
Lyn

Wow, I'm impressed. This chapter answered questions and has also left me with new questions, please update.

AH! I found it! I'm so excited! I still LOVE this story, and I really can't wait to read more. I'm so proud of you for actually taking the initiative to post this, seriously. I hope you get tons of awesome feedback and helpful critique from this website, because I know I've learned a lot from writing for fanficion. I'm totally about to get an account with this site now so I can get your updates!
Love in Christ,
Lyn

The storyline sounds amazing. I'm curious to see where you go with it. Please write more.