LOVE this one! Very very much!

You should write a comic one with someone trapped an a crumbling haunted old castle type place, with rattling chains and other generic haunted type props! I think you'd be quite excellent at it :)

Wow, I really liked this quite a bit. It was really entertaining. I love your use of framed narrative. Superbly executed.

A very well-done children's story. Good job.

i think th story was good i hope you add another chapter

Aw, that was such a cute little story! I love the way you narrated it - you talking to Adrianne, which of course is in second person because you're also talking *about* her. (I wish fictionpress let italics in reviews!) This form gave it some spice and made it seem even personal.

Happy Halloween!

That's a pretty good adventure for a kid.

~SirScott

this 'is' cool, even more. i loved the simplicity and i really enjoyed reading it. stories that are told in second person are rare but this was interesting.

i kinda wonder about the bold and the way it was alligned..

A nice cute little story. :)