existential poetry right durr!

hahaha! not a bad haiku :)

Wow. :) Amazing, I've never read haiku before but now you have inspired me to read nore and more.

Usually this sentiment (in my case) only applies to my sister in-law. Nicely put.

Brilliant. I love how you can capture so much in so few words. :)

not a huge fan of haiku but this is simple and not bogged down in WAY too much metaphor like I typically see. It actually gives you something to think about if you choose.

ohh snapp! stephh you did it again :D
i be see you on monday poh-poh (:

Beautiful idea!
Quite an image! :)

As "Isca" said in their review, the haiku is supposed to be 5 syllables on the first line, then 7 on the 2nd, then 5 again. At least, that's what I was always told. *shrug*

I love this though. It's got this sort of strong mysteriousness/longing feeling to it. "Watching clouds fade with the sky" is a beautiful line. *fave*

Short, and I don't know if it exactly qualifies as a haikou (some other reviewers seemed to think it didn't) but I liked it very much nonetheless. It still sounded good, anyway. Also, the poem had an interesting, whimsical tone to it, which I'm sure most people can relate to. Standing there, looking at the sky, wondering what might have been . . .

Stylistically, the haiku should look like this:

Watching clouds fade with
the sky; I wonder, if the
day could lead elsewhere.

That said, it's a good first haiku. "Watching clouds fade with the sky; I wonder" was my favourite part - it's very serene and thought-provoking. :)

Different format but very pretty. :)Keep up the good work

Beautiful! I loved it.:)