I love this story, there's character development and a real storyline. It's a really good story and I cant wait to see where it leads. :)

I like where this is going. You have an excellent writing style! Keep up the great work!

This story is REALLY awesome! You should seriously write some more! And I love how descriptive you are, it makes the story more clear and you can imagine what's going on!

I really like the way you write. Eager to read some more...your writing just flows!