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romanticrazzy 2009-12-06 . chapter 1
It's so simple and short, I love it.
Isca 2009-10-28 . chapter 1
"Then your hand on my thigh." Ahaha. Excellent twist. It sounds like "Monday Morning Sexual Harrassment" to me :P.
Moondog Dozier 2009-10-28 . chapter 1
Unexpected ending. Thought provoking. MD:77.
nickyO 2009-10-28 . chapter 1
Sounds like a lovely way to start the morning. :) Nicely done.
Anna Christie 2009-10-27 . chapter 1
Since I suck at reviewing, I can't say much. haha But this is interesting. Makes me want to know what "it" is.

PS in the first line you said "Its starts". Did you mean to do that or did you mean "It starts"? Just wondering!
Cuenta 2009-10-26 . chapter 1
I think it's an interesting concept for waking up on Monday Mornings. Great job.
in theory 2009-10-26 . chapter 1
The hot tea lapping against my jaw image brings to my mind erm, well ** to be brutally honest (I think of vaginas as mouths, and being a drinker of tea I can envision him with tea-smelling breath, so it's not a totally farfetched idea honest..!) I'm not sure if there is enough said in this, although perhaps I've missed the point. There is a definite teasing in that final section though, and maybe that's the tone you wanted to express, but I feel this could be longer. I'm no expert on haikus though so take that with a pinch of salt.

I'm hijacking a friend's computer at the moment so will tackle your larger pieces soon m'dear :D

Jack
Dale Christopher 2009-10-26 . chapter 1
I like the use of the word 'lapping', it's not a word you hear often in this context. The hand on the thigh can be seen as either comforting or sexual, but it seems to me that either way, it's expected. Well written.

Peace, Daze
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