just so you know, when you write "Shore" as in yes or okay, it is really spelled "Sure." "Shore" is like a beach.

Though there's still some mistakes on spelling/typing words (like 'hate' alter to 'hat' or 'lend' to 'land'). But, the story's very good XD I like Shiro & Akira very much. They'll surely be a great couple XP

:) LOL, a puppy named pain to "pain" you. That one was funny. Ok, opinion. First off, I'm glad you changed all the "me"s. :). It sounds better now. You do sound very random from time to time. I'm not sure which character I want Aki to end up with. At first I thought it would be Shiro, but then two more guys appear. They all seem to have hard-ons for Aki, but they aren't really detailed all that well.
A lot of things are going on that aren't really fully explained. Like with Luca being a demon. No one would accept it just like that. And it needs to be explained. Also, why the fainting?
Oh, and before I forget, I was really amused that you used lots of names familiar from anime.