These last two chapters were awesome, sis! Length is looking great. And your descriptions and stuff just keeps getting better and better, seriously. The "stranger" write-in in chapter 3 was a great addition. I liked it! And, of course, LUC! OMG, YES his appearance pleased me! I love him so much. :) It's great to read him again! *sighs* UPDATE SOON!

Yup, the improvement in your writing is even more noticeable in this chapter. Very good descriptions. I feel like I can really picture everything. Great job! Looking forward to reading the next chatper (and REALLY looking forward to reading Luc)! :)

OMG! This is so well written. I went back and compared it to the first chapter of the original story and I was like WOW, your writing has really grown. Great job so far! I'm looking forward to reading more. :)