Great chapter. So far I found one error in it. In about the middle of the chapter the conversation bewteen Jessica and Kain:

"You must have some kind of headquarters," Drake said, searching the area to the best of his abilities. "Take me there and we can discuss it in full then."

I believe that it should be Kain said and not Drake said.

Finally some more action. Bring on chapter 13 please

So, first off, obviously the first chapter is almost entirely in italics and I'd be lying if I said it wasn't distracting.

But, it's totally forgivable because I think you are an amazing writer. Even though the dialogue is a little cliche, it's fine because I get the feeling you're trying to put across a certain vibe, so it was all very entertaining. Try to switch up your "speaking" verbs and keep going because you're doing a great job.