I can see the influence, thank you. And it wouldn't be right to suggest revision tips, as it's not finished. Finish first, revise later. It's like a house, you have to build the foundations before you can lay the bricks.

Anyhow, the chapter was good for character development and plot set-up. There's nothing wrong with a filler chapter, they can be very informative. I have a feeling we'll find out more about Emmer's friend later, so I won't ask about him now.
One thing, is this a mistake: 'one organism'? I figure that one did ought to be fixed if so.

Unrelated, was New Moon any better than Twilight? I'm not a fan of the books; too much emo, not enough action, and I found the first film a complete cringe fest. The only thing that looks good about the new film is Jacob- without the long hair he's actually very attractive, has a very nice sixpack too.

Enjoy writing, and I'll drop a review in again soon.

I got who the father of Leela is (only a numpty couldn't guess), does he know? He got sold around the time that Charlotte first got pregnant, right? It can't have been the reason for his selling though can it? That has to have more to do with Emmer.

Other questions I have:
What exactly are Companions (aside from slaves), are they meant to bare their master's children? Or are they just meant as entertainers and sexual partners?
Do Emmer and Charlotte share the same Father? Are they the product of Campanions?
Who is the father of Saffron's baby? (that one just keeps nagging, don't know why)

Good Chapter. I was going to say that Dove was a favourite when I reviewed before, but there was only one scene with him at the time so I didn't think I could judge. Upon reading this I can conclude I like him. You can't not love a guy who's good with kids. Also, love the fact he found Jade's notes.
Keep writing and good luck with Round Three Testing (I can't pretend I know what it involves, but it sounds nasty.)

Nice work.

I read this story! I put it on alert once I read the first chapter, I just don't often review. Point: please do upload it here, there may be many more lurkers out there who read but don't like to review. Don't be discouraged.
Favourite: I like Jade, I don't think he's whiny, you can't really judge him until you know exactly what happened eight years ago.
Least Favourite: It wasn't originally Emmer, but that might change. I actually disliked Charlotte, not sure why, I think it's because you get a sense of her allowing Emmer contact with Jade, which had the consequence of destroying him, I guess.

Amazing once again. You had the perfect amount of dialogue and detailed posts, plus all the characters acted differently and uniquely, which many people find difficult when writing with so many characters. I bow down to you!

Hallo!
Amazing start, I just love it. Jade is a strong, hardy character, from what I can tell. It takes a lot to be quiet and take things like that. I can't wait to read more.

(P.S. On gaia, in the NaNoWriMo guild, I'm Catherine Bronte :D)

hey. this is looking interesting. certainly something i would read. keep going with it! i'm also doing a nano this year (for the first time), if you should have any interest in taking a look. sorry for the plug, but i would like some feedback for it. sorry. i like jade. his inner-commentary is quite amusing. i would love to see where this goes!~