Okay, so this will probably be short but if I don't review now I don't think I'll ever get my lazy butt back around to it.

Virgil sounds like a normal kid--muahahha. Wait 'til all that changes.

Door frame of glowing vines. Tasteful.

I love Niamh's foreignness. She's so funny.

Speaking of which, I was actually joking about the "No, I wasn't born yesterday, I was born last week" thing just before I read it. Great minds must think alike or something, 'cause that was just way too perfect to be coincidence.

Looking forward to the weirdness to come, I am. Bring it on! :D

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Sorry this is so delayed. I've been selfishly absorbed in preparing for the three days I won't be able to meet my quota this month, due to an off-island trip.

ANYway...

I didn't realize Iolyn's family was Jewish. Interesting.

"Ha, Christianity was like Judaism's rebelling teenage child, in a way."
It is. Just like the USA is the rebellious problem child of England (and the world, in some cases, but we all think that America is so darn cool so we never punish it).

Ah, Micah. Poor kid. I would have laughed at his Jell-o comment.

Wow, Pheobe was being mean.

Oh, never mind. I get it now. She's playing hard to get. How cute. ;P

I was watching that TV show Roseanne the other day, and one of the ladies at this fancy party was saying "Oh yes, I love that girl. She's the perfect poster child for New York--2 pounds above organ failure"
I thought it was great. Pheobe's inner monologue about how she's supposed to hate the way she looks reminded be of it.

Oh yeah, they are smitten.

"...you have another think coming."
Yeah. I think you might notice why I'm bringing this up.

Secret Window. Never saw it, but I had my friend tell me all about it (it's how I know my movies). It definitely sounds like it could be a scary movie, if you were in that mind set.

If I were Phoebe I'd probably be skeptical, too, but being a reader I realize that it's probably true, just because stories work like that.

Oh, nice. I'm going to try and read the next chapter now, if I can squeeze it in before school.

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Well, I was just about to go to bed, but then a new chapter appeared! So quickly after I requested, too. It makes me feel special (because there is definitely no possible way that could be a coincidence at all...nope...).

Niamh = NEEV? 0.o Look at this - even the names are intriguing! I'm not even sure how that pronunciation works.

Ha! Grace and Virgil only friends. Silly boy. In other news, Niamh is adorable. I liked that she had trouble remembering words. I also like the line about being hurt so much that you stop moving forever (that sentence came out creepier than I intended...). It was like *shiver*, and yet naive and innocent in an endearingly sweet way at the same time.

Boy he's never seen before?! Like, boy who randomly died boy? Possibly? ! Super excited for the continuation!!

Oh, and don't worry about having not replied. NaNo and school are allowed to come first. ;) Also, I love mozzarella sticks, so thanks for those.

Ok, I know, I said it already, but DAMN this story is interesting! I mean, seriously. I want to know more!

So, this chapter made me like Phoebe a whole lot more. Yay to getting to see new sides of her! I giggled a lot. This was really cute. The banter between Micah and Phoebe when he was trying to tell her the story was a lot of fun, and I muchly enjoyed it. And giggled pretty much continuously. Did I mention that?

Hmm, Virgil, we meet again! So. Very. Curious!

Again, broken record, awesome job!

Write more please. :D *folds hands into lap and waits semi-patiently*

That made me laugh, too. But you know what line made me laugh the most? "Phoebe was a menace." For some reason, that really tickled me. Best segue EVER.

Still interested. Still excited. Still have nothing for you to improve on. I'm not very helpful, am I?

Here, I'll tell you what I like! I really love your writing style. You break the fourth wall to talk to your readers, but rather than that being jarring or breaking my suspension of belief, it makes this feel like it is a story someone is telling me before bed, or over a cup of coffee (albeit, a really exciting and intense cup of coffee) or something. I don't think that's a thing people commonly pull off with this amount of success. The narration has character, and therefore the story has character, which gives it an awesomely unique tone that is really fun. I feel like I'm involved here! Things like adding "No, really" to the descriptions, as though you sensed that I might not believe you when you tell me that crazy Tinker Bell light is moving, are not only fun and make me giggle a little but also make me feel as though this is not just a story you are telling me over an intense cup of coffee. No - this is a TRUE story you are telling me over an intense cup of coffee. So, instead of destroying my suspension of belief, you have somehow magically ENHANCED it. How did you do that? That's crazy!

Another thing I love is how quickly your characters come to life (something I found true in WWID as well). Two chapters and a prologue in, and I already can relate to each character, find them believable, and care about them. Really well done! Keep up the awesome work!

Omigod, how did it manage to just get exponentially more interesting with just one chapter when it was already insanely interesting to begin with?!! You are the master. I swear. I feel a story alert subscription coming on!

So, my thoughts as I was reading were as follows: "Oh, hey, her name's Phoebe! I bet this is the story Virgil was writing, cool! Oh look, more Virgil. Oh, back to his story and - whoa, wait, what? The house - is it Virgil's?! Is that - are they - is this - ARE THEY GONNA MEET?! HOLY CRAP, THEY ARE! THEY'RE MEETING! WOAH!" And then I freaked out for awhile. Like, I almost fell off my bed. Virgil totally knows what's gonna happen to Iolyn! AH!

Basically, I am loving it so far! Again, nothing I can see to change. You have shown me once more that you are insanely good at hooking readers right from the get go. Fantastic job!!

Yay! You're doing NaNo again this year!! Me too, and I am determined to actually win this time! *determined face*

Okay, enough on THAT unrelated stuff. Uwah! I am so excited! What an intriguing beginning! I am so so very curious right now, it is not even funny. Though it may not be funny, it is a good thing. Definitely will be reading more. This was a beautiful, sweet (yet sad) opening, and it has me incredibly interested already! Aw, it was just...aw. That's what is was. I really don't have any advice...I liked it so far! I got really excited at the end because I did not understand it at all. Not in a "what? That was so incoherent!" or a "what? This is far too confusing!" way, but rather a "What? Tell me more, TELL ME MORE!" way! And I am very excited to learn more. :D

Well, anyways, happy writing and good luck with NaNo!

At first I thought Virgil was writing about Iolyn (cool name, btw) and now I'm really not so sure. Three Pheobes--there must be a connection between at least two of them (actually, probably the character in Virgil's book which is Iolyn's little sister which Virgil later named his daughter is my current theory). That said, I'm also guessing that Virgil wrote Iolyn's life and knew it was true.

I can't explain why he's scared, though. Maybe it's for Iolyn.

I'm excited to see what you come out with next, definitely. Sounds like it's going to be a really interesting story.

That comment about Bronson so totally was biased. Don't even try to say otherwise. XP

Happy writing--speaking of which, are you just using Word or are you using Write or Die? If you aren't I strongly urge you to--I wrote like, 1300 words in a half hour this morning? Something like that.

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I have to say, I do feel special being mentioned in the author's note. XP I have the same problem with page numbers, too. Don't get why they won't just show up already.

I love the frustration of Virgil's writer's block. I can totally relate, though I would probably cringe at the wasted trees.

The religious references are an interesting touch. Makes me think of Philip Pullman and the His Dark Materials trilogy. Never would have thought that that series would become an almost-commentary on religion.

Sounds like this will be interesting, indeed. Reading on.

Oh! And I realized a few days ago that I never mentioned anything to you about the quote stealing from that oneshot with Kirsten in my review reply. Take anything you like--I'm personally rather proud of the one you want to log. :)

Reading on...

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