Wow, this is amazing. I like the way you hint at things, and the descriptions. However, I wish that you would describe the man and the girl in more detail.

I'm curious, did you reach the 50,0 word goal for Nanowrimo?

Hey you... I randomly checked my old email and got the FP announcement on your uploads. I just wanted to say, awesome that you're doing NaNo again. Good luck with it! (or what do writers say as not to jinx it? I don't know... break a quill?) I'll be reading... :) Hope all is going well with you.
-Casey