On the first chapter (Growing Pains):
Cool. Love the dialog. It's very entertaining to read and creatively written, and it shows a lot of character depth pretty early on, which is good.
I laughed when I read the description of the twins: "The twins looked the same, only they held themselves differently. Margret was doll-like and liked to help people. Maggie was harsh and liked to destroy things." ^_^ But then you went on to describe one as tall and the other short, one with a flat nose, one with a curved-down nose. The hair makes sense because of cosmetics, but the rest doesn't really make sense.
I normally don't agree with cursing if it's not absolutely needed, but you do a good job with them, ans it works. Every once and a while, though, you sort of combine curses with euphemisms, like in the paragraph "“Damn,” she murmured. “I’ve done a heck of a lot better.”" You combined "damn" and "heck" in on sentence. It works, but I'm just pointing it out because some people might find it weird.


Love how it starts to not make sense once Gallows comes in and starts talking to the group about the "new" ones. And the subtle, this-is-how-it-is comment on the "disease" is great.:-) These things bring up questions from lack of information to the reader, not from lack of info to the character, which is always a great strategy.
The fact that he just goes back to (what seems to be) his everyday business after this mysterious (to the reader)gathering is a subtle touch that makes the end satisfying, but still encouraging the reader to continue to the next chapter, as I shall do now... :-)

I REALLY like this - it's funny, it's interesting, the characters were good (even the killjoy main character, which is great), and it looks like it's going somewhere.

The dialogue between Caleb and Draco? It sparkled.

Awesome job. Keep it up! (And may the muses never leave your sight. A cakewalk NaNoWriMo ain't.)