very vivid... :S but still awesome!

Overall a well-written story; it flows very well and has some really nice moments (I especially like the opening line, and how you repeat the "kiss boys, sleep with girls" at the end). However I felt like the night before Jade disappears is a bit unclear. I don't really understand why Jade just upped and left - is it because she's afraid of love? Other than that, nice work :)

Wow! an amazing story! And I love the word play at the end. Its a very realist peice.

It would be very different if someone else wrote this. Your way of writing is amazing. I really like how you fit 'Jade' in, such as 'like the stone, like her heart.' and the wordplay of 'Jaded' at the end. The content is realistic/harsh but you are able to soften the tone and such with your words. Brilliant piece. :)

Augh.

Jade stole my heart and tore it up in 20 words. And I liked it.

A lot. I feel like it happened to me. Directly.

I love this story. It is tragic and heart breaking yet it brings to light the truth of how vulnerable and fragile a true love can be. Either that or I'm full of crap and its just a great f*ing story

I LOVED this. LOVED.

this is very well-written.

the emotion, or rather, the lack of emotion at the end (the part about her feeling empty) really speaks to me.

"Do you like girls? I have a boyfriend. That's not what I asked." I loved how realistic this part was. :)

Wow. This was really a powerful piece of work. I enjoyed it very much and I would like to see more of your work. Nothing is perfect, but this actually comes very close to perfect writing, in my opinion. Keep it up, and I hope this review encourages you to continue your writing! :)

i really like this. i wonder why i didn't read it before.

it's a very interesting transformation, through and through.

and i like the play on "jade" and "jaded". very clever.

it's funny, because jade sounds like my girl, stretched to extremes.

Beautiful and amazing. I really like the way you've written it, it's extraordinary. I can relate to some of it, and think me to the rest and it makes it hit deeper. I'll probably re-read this lots of times and find something new every time, i'm sure. If all your femslash turns out like this, I'd love to read more. Also if it doesn't.

This is a sad, entirely believable portrait of someone who is what I'd call emotionally lost. I liked the descriptions of how the narrator sees and reacts to Jade; the fascination and envy and lust and insecurity. It all made a lot of sense. The last sentence is intriguing; the idea of someone having always wanted to be jaded.

I would have liked to find out what happened to Jade, but given that the narrator doesn't know either, this is completely logical and not a criticism of the story.

Well done, realistic work.