ok pretty acurate but still mabey you should try something else you know make another attempt in another place

I really like it. It puts into a simple verse my entire feelings about religion. If you're interested, I'll send you a sonnet I wrote on this same subject. =)

Peace and Love,

khan

Love it! Short, powerful, and to the point. Your meter is really good and consistent, something I usually dont find on Fiction Press. I like your rhyming of "god" with "fraud", not a coupling you usually see together. You've also got some nice alliteration going on: "pleading prayers" "Father is a fraud". Good job!

The emotion behind this poem is powerful. Short and sweet and well-written.

If a god/dess existed, I'd have thought s/he wrote that quatrain.

Same thing happened with me. Good job of putting it in words.
;)

good poem for an aithest. (sorry if i misspelled it.)