| Reviews for Strange Musings |
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WickedMissy 5/9/10 . chapter 2thumps up for Weird Philosophy |
scripted 2/19/10 . chapter 2Just get the silly mistakes (typos really) out the way xP "although this time there was no real emotion caused because of it, (although this time there was no real emotion caused because of it)" I don't know if that's a mistake or not - but It's a bit confusing putting the same sentence, right after itself, in brackets :) "At certain times, she wonder" do you mean "she'd"? -Real review- Aw :( That was so sad! Great idea and it was written well But such a sad idea - for someone to go through life without knowing the true feeling of love. Because she had been forced to only be introduced to it all as an act - especially at such a young age :( I love the psychological aspect of that though, of how acting so much by something that has been written out for you - something that isn't real - can affect you in real life. She couldn't live life that wasn't handed to her on a script, every word written out for her - every movement directed for her. That really makes you think, so really well done with that aspect On a writing aspect, though, I have to say that I love the beginning! Never seen a...anything start with the words "One Word:" before - and it really grabbed my attention! Great idea! :D I also like how you keep ending the paragraphs with that one word, "Meaningless". The repetition adds great effect! And it creates a beautiful ending, with the same word used - but a whole different meaning :) So, anyway, really good job with this piece. It really makes you think and creates sympathy for the character - and explore the girl's mind. Amazing job :DD I don't know why you can only sit down for 10 minutes a day and write - you're really good! Perhaps you're just too distracted? Try writing before you go to sleep :) Distractions are always out the way then and you might feel better just letting it all out. Writing also can make you feel calmer too, especially with handwritten stuff - so it can be great to get to sleep :D Anywho, great job! -scripted |
CuriousContradiction 1/2/10 . chapter 24Wow. I just sat down and read all of these in one sitting. Two words for you: awesome work. I mean that for all of these. You really have a way of combining interesting words, imagery, and internal dialogue within a few sentences or paragraphs. I'm also impressed by your discipline. I know I wouldn't be able to follow through with doing so many each day. The one I related to the most was Neverland. Story of my life right now. I'm sorry you're going through that too. Growing up is tough because you think back on your childhood and wish you could've enjoyed it a bit longer. I guess... it's still like that now. I don't know how old you are, but I want to try to enjoy being a teenager as much as I can at the moment just because I remember thinking I didn't appreciate my childhood enough. I'll slowly get through all of these. Again, good work. I really liked reading through all of these insights and descriptions. :) |
CuriousContradiction 12/23/09 . chapter 9Oh man, I really need time to properly review all of these. I will eventually. I read them all. Just please please please remind me to review if I don't get to all of them within this week. They deserve their praise. :) I'll just start with reviewing the one about the Stranger. I think it really showcased your ability as a writer. I loved... that it incorporated just everything. Life. Relationships, memories, past, present, futures, dreams. All that in probably less than a page. I also liked the lack of a named character behind this. It made it less personal but more personal at the same time because I felt like I could relate more. And the last two lines... beautiful. Enough said. :) |
CuriousContradiction 11/7/09 . chapter 2The part about amber eyes was so, so cool. The part about spider catching a fly makes it less romantic and more gruesome, but the last line was awesome. And the beginning of this story is really intriguing. I like that no names were mentioned, but that as a reader, I still learn about who she is. It makes it all the more interesting to me. Thank you so much for not going into a physical description about her sparkling violet eyes and shining golden waves of hair that cascade down her shoulders because the way you said it- the paparazzi praising her beauty- showed instead of told. The part about how she played along with costar romances during interviews and the whole relation of acting as a job and acting as a lifestyle (in terms of romance) was really interesting (gah, I need more words) too. I'm looking forward to reading more! |
sophiesix 11/5/09 . chapter 4Lovely! just beautiful. |
sophiesix 11/5/09 . chapter 2I really liked the first sentence here, it was really captivating (lol, no pun intended). THe story i enjoyed to, but not as much: it felt a bit too 'told'? That was teh style of it, but to improve it (though i guess that would go over your ten minutes ;) ) I'd want it to have more lines like teh first one it, to be more 'meaningful', if you like (lol). like that first kiss, i wanted to know more about it. teh awkwardness was a great start, but i wanted a sense of what it was like, more? Dunno if that makes sense :) |
Kristin Teabag 11/5/09 . chapter 5Hmm, most of these little pieces were very short, but I did enjoy every single one of them. I especially liked the one about the actress, because you rarely see a story told from an actors perspective. I also thought that you had good word choice and none of your mini-stories felt rushed. |