 surroundedANDalone 2009-11-22 . chapter 1Interesting twist at the end. I was wondering where you were going with it. :) |
 Sergeant Rock 2009-11-19 . chapter 1I agree with the wolves. Woodstock was a disgrace, with a bunch of pot-smoking, cocaine snorting, long-haired hippies who believed in nothing but defying the law and disrespecting authority, listening to long haired, pot-smoking, cocaine snorting artists who felt like setting bad examples for the kids of the day. Sorry for ranting. |
 Cuenta 2009-11-11 . chapter 1This was well written. I like the dialogue and allegory of the pigs (not sure if it was your intention, but I feel the pigs and the wolves represent something.)
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{βIt looks like a garbage dump,β snorted Teeth.} I don't think "snorted" is a dialogue tag (at least from what I've learned), so I think there should be a period after "dump." |
 letyoursoultakeflight 2009-11-11 . chapter 1Ha :) Lovely! Such an excellent twist to the piggy version! |
 Isca 2009-11-07 . chapter 1"βI think they enjoy the mud more than the sex,β Eyes said." Oh my, that made me chuckle. :) |
 Mirabella 2009-11-06 . chapter 1Reminds me a bit of "Animal Farm". :)
Nicely done. |
 East-0f-Eden 2009-11-05 . chapter 1LOL LOL LOL! Do you go to Woodstock? I'm just curious. I would have loved to been there. Jefferson Airplane and the Who..Pete Townshed beating that guy up. My generation justs spray paints stuff. |