Hey again,

Just read chapters 2-5. I noticed some spelling and grammar issues(probably about 3 or 4) but I can't be bothered finding them (sorry haha) because I was enjoying the story too much.

The slums story completely creeped me out, and Peter's slightly resolutive recognition of the horrid state of the poor was convicting. Your metaphors are striking and have got me hooked into the story.

One criticism that I have is that your main character, Peter bagged out cricket! I love cricket and found it quite offensive, just joking - but glad you gave it a mention. I'll definitely be looking more forward to reading more of this - there is nothinbg like rich Londoners! Have fun writing it (that is if you keep going with it). Thanks Kenley!

Hey Kenley,

This won't be a massive review as I just inquisitively clicked the link from Facebook, but this is truly great stuff! I'm not a very seasoned reader, but when I do read novels I easily get hooked. First of all, you and Nate are absolute legends, so much creative talent.

About your first chapter, I found it quite entertaining. Your ability to describe what sounds like an early 20th century in London (assuming the cabs are cars post mass production) was very fascinating. Your descriptive parallel between a desperate working class and a content upper class established a comfortable picture for me as a reader.

I also liked the assumed potential romance between your central character and young miss Castlereagh. I really appreciated the way the two families assumed everything was falling into place planned perfectly.

Just for reference, the only fair tips I can give you is that I noticed a few possible grammatical errors or mis-spelled words. When Peter is in the cab you said that he wanted to look out of "said window" with content. Also when Peter gets home you refer to his family's home as his families' home, implying that he has several families living in that home.

Apart from that very good. I think when I finish my last not yet competent assesments off I'll read your other chapters and give you some more feedback if youwould appreciate it.

I really like this story. You seem to have a good grasp of the time period. I like Peter and the way he gets cold feet about marriage, very realistic. And I was as scared as he was when he wondered into the slums. I'm going to favorite this. I can't wait to see where it goes.