Very moving. I found it to be very bold, its hard to put personal experiences online. I love your last line. Beautiful imagery.

This is really good. You used visceral descriptions in this to great effect, making the mood of the poem very intense. I also like the way this flows from start to finish as if it were a sort of winding stream; it keeps going, but not too straight, and it doesn't linger in any one place for too long. I would have placed a few commas in the second half of the poem, both for consistency (you you them at the start) and to separate your thoughts. I might have also used semicolons because there are no periods (a stylistic decision which, along with the lack of capitalization and apostrophes, improves the poem by making it feel honest and spur-of-the-moment). Overall, this is very well done.

~403F

it's dark and hopeless but it's strong too at the same time since that one's leaving that place.

So vivid and alive, really well done. :)