I really enjoy reading your story, and am now wondering if you are going to continue this? It is for the contest, and from what I know of the contest (which is almost nothing lol) it is only a month long? Well anyways I really enjoyed it and look forward to whats next! Later

oh!
thanks so much for the chapter!! :D
can't wait to see more!! :D :D :D

ooh this seems interesting so far. i'm looking forward to your updates :]

Shaul is... very forceful. And almost overbearing. I can understand her dislike for him.

I love the way you described her appearance- the green eyes/ gown/necklace bit, and then the black cloth to hide the golden hair.

If all of them have golden eyes, why was Shaul having them so surprising?

I'm not sure if I understand the trick the princes played on Celestia: did they just leave cloth all over her room?

And, here: “Why don’t I slit your neck and let you try for yourself?” I think you should replace 'try' with 'see' or something.

Update soon!

Awesome! As you know, I love fantasy romance, and while this is so completely different form Armistice- which you've removed! Why?- it's still the same genre, and I really do like it. Celeste's character seems pretty well developed, and you seem to know exactly where you're going with this. I'm actually quite excited about this. Will now go read the next chapter...

P.S. Any hope for Armistice?

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LOVE IT!
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I love the story!

this story is amazingg! please continue i cant wait to find out what happenss!!

Okay I loved this chapter... Im completely hooked into this story already..

I only have one thing to critique.
You have Dayna joking that she will join Sanu's Temple as a priestess. And in the same paragraph you have celestia saying "and you will not become a nun."

Maybe im crazy, but a priestess and a nun are two diffrent things.


Loved the rest of it. Post More SOON!

I really like this story and I so smell a romance between Shaul and Celeste! XD
Looking forward to more! Grtz Silencia

Hello! I'm sorry it took me so long to review this--I'm an awful reviewer.
I'm taking the 'give feedback' stuff seriously!
Here are my comments--I wrote as I read, so it's a bit choppy.
*I thnk that the first paragraph is awkward. I have no clue how to fix it, but it feels wordy.
*Is Dayna really only 16 (as you said in the last chapter)? Because she sounds older than Celeste in their exchange about marriage.
*I'm a little confused at the 'multi-coloured strips of cloth', could you paint a little stronger mental image of this? (maybe describe the colors, where the strips are placed, etc.)
*"My hair went into a tight bun, covered by a black cloth to hide -their- golden sheen." Should it be '-its- golden sheen'?
*"It was definitely not pleasant to have ones neck cut" Should that be 'one's neck cut'?
*Celeste has a fasination with the color green. :)
*"Levi is so much like father..." Should that be 'Father'?
*"Another strangled laugh left me. "That is was." Should that be 'it'?
*Wow! Great, LONG chapter!! I am smitten with this story...
I can't wait for the next installment, and please, just tell me if you don't want all these comments--I won't be offended at all. :)

just started reading...n your writing and story is absolutely awesome!!i love your story so far (and i know i will only get better)!

will eagerly await the next chapter!

I am definitely loving you and this story right now. ^-^ So interesting..and fascinating. You definitely caught me into this one and I can't wait for more. Good luck with the rest of NaNoWriMo!

Much love to you! That was a lovely long chapter! I am already wholly invested in this story, and it is only the second chapter - I applaud you.

One question - how many princesses are there? There are the five princes, and Princesses Cay and Dayna, but that does not make up the ten at the table.

And is Prince Shaul's name pronounced like "shawl"?

:) love it already!
-Tin

Yeah, I do love you right now :)
I hope you're doing well with NaNo (which you probably are, as I'm stalking you on LJ and thus know that your words' count is already pretty high!), and I'm waiting for the next chapters.
I haven't seen anything odd or sounding like a mistake in this chapter, but maybe I overlooked something.
At any rate, I like this story a lot! I think it has a kind of gothic feel to it, probably because of all the descriptions of the castle... Nice! :)

aw i feel bad for celeste!
and whoaa i didn`t think shaul had cut her throat deep until i read the last part of the chapter :O
awesome chapter btw! i can`t wait until the next one :D