Hmm. It was a little confusing, but in a good way. I'd love a longer chapter so I can get a feel of what's going on. For a series of one-shots, though, it works well.

Well, this is an intriguing start. I like the mood you've achieved with the dialogue and as always your characters are great. I'm looking forward to reading more, so you'd better keep updating this one (and not stop it halfway like the last few)!

Incidentally, my email is absolutely dead right now, so I'm having trouble answering yours. X_x