Grammatically speaking, you seem to have a comma problem. But that's ok.

I like this. I really do. Your writing style's pretty good, but even more than that is the innovation + newness that comes with it - and that poem was plenty good too. Did you come up with it yourself, or...

That paragraph just completely shattered my Disney perceptions of Alice in Wonderland...

Seems really interesting thus far.

So, I was tempted to review both chapters, that way you would only need one other review, but I thought I might give some others a chance to review. XD

I really like how you portrayed Cheshire, especially in human form, and I'm eager to see how the others turn out to be. I'm quite interested in the new character, the Dormouse, as well. I noticed a few grammar errors here and there, but that can be easily fixed by rereading over it or enlisting the help of a beta.

Great job and keep up the good work. :)

yay! I loved it! This is an interesting twist to a classic story. Good Idea! Umm... i have a story that I want to post on fictionpress... and i know how to get started, but for some reason, I can't seem to figure out how to add chapters... could you help me?... just tell me how to do it or something? cuz... i can add the story... but everytime I want to add a new chapter, it makes me add the whole story...

If you could help,it would be greatly appreciated. Plus, I'd like you to read and review... so?

thank you!

Oh, I see now. I feel the need to know who the little boy is but, I have a feeling we'll find out so'll I'll be patient. Great chapter! Keep updating :)

So, here's your third review, which means you have to continue! I think you have a really interesting story line here. I've never been one for Alice in Wonderland (as it kinda creeped me out as a child) but I have to say the twist you have on it is very compelling. I also loved My Teeth Are Munching On - I couldn't help but laugh, as sad as that sounds. Very good and I expect to see an update within the next few days as you promised. ;)

Hi!
I just read your chapter...The story sure seems interesting! Waiting to see how you portray the other characters!

I like it :D I do hope you get the next two reviews after this one, cause I do want to read it :)