Oh! This makes me sad and happy at the same time. Well done - both the rhyme and rhythm are great. I'd suggest that you separate it into individual lines so it's easier to read. (Right now it's one great mass - something must've happened when you uploaded it. Unless you meant for it to be that way? If you did, I apologize!)

This is very interesting; I like that you used now punctuation, line breaks, or capitals because it makes the poem seem more raw and honest. It's interesting how you still had a rhyme scheme and nice-sounding meter when there were no breaks, it works very well. Overall I just really like this, great writing.

~403F