I like this. It's nice, meaningful and cute. It's the type of writing that can be simple and cute, but still be more than just that. I like the rhythm, and the way it moves. Very nice.

Your last stanza in this described it all for me. "Effortless" the poem seemed to flow from you very easily and I liked the irony of "You might never see it" because it's up on the Internet you know, like Fictionpress, but that doesn't mean that whoever this was written for will read it (believe me I know that), so I could really relate to this poem, just trying to say something and then not ever having it seen. Successful poem!

Beautiful Sheriff! Just my type of poem ;-D. I love a good romantic poem. And I loved how you were able to use all the senses in the longing for the loved one (hence the title :-D). I think my favorite stanza was the second to last where you talked about tracing his/her name in the faded gold foil. Beautiful!

Good luck in WCC!

"And I picked one up for you." God. That has to be the sweetest thing I've heard all day. :)

What a lovely, eloquent piece! Though I think it works better without the final italics, because the rythm if the poem already gives that final emphasis. The rythm was wonderfully strong through out, i thought, apart from “My fingers traced the letters.” This seemed to have a different rhythm to it that the other similar lines, without the final syllable emphasis, which pulled me up at first. It gives it a sort of unfinished, reaching quality, which could be reflective of the atmosphere of longing communicated by the words of the stanza. Interesting. I didn’t like that stanza at first, but now that I’ve thought on it a bit more, I think I do like that effect. :) Good luck in the WCC!

What a sweet poem! I loved the word choice and the format used. Each stanza looked well thought out and meaningful.

Good job and good luck in WCC this month!

i really like the first stanza.. i think having a star named after you is truly romantic..

always keep writing!
~tiara♥