"I can't tell you." I love this opening line. The reader is immiediately drawn in and is curious to find out more. It's like telling someone, "Oh, I know a secret, but I can't tell you." It just makes you want to know even more. :P

"Swaddled in a cloak of gloom." Stunning.

"It's my soul. It is your beauty." What a lovely ending! :)

Absolutely beautiful, Squid! I can't stop smiling!

"You never mentioned the sailboat I’d need

to survive those eyes of yours" This reminds me of e e cummings...such a lovely opening line.

"I never told you make me fly." So tragic and beautiful.

"linking hands perfectly like

our hearts in chains" A wonderful metaphor.

This has a wonderful rhythm to it, and a wonderful vibe. I got a "love song" vibe.

Amazing!

Amazing, this is simply BEAUTIFUL.

It's so mellow, and relaxing, and cute, and it flows SO smoothly. I'm in love with this peice. The emotion and everything is just stunning. Lovely work! :D:D

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