|Reviews for The Conception|
| midnightwrighter 7/8/10 . chapter 2
Hi! I just wanted to point oout a mistake.
Then he slid two of the lube dampened fingers into Devin's exposed hole to make sure he was still ready. Satisfied that that was the case, Jayden looked back up to stare into Devin's eyes intently as he lined up and slid inside of his body in one long, slow, gentle movement slid inside of his body in one long, slow, gentle movement.'
You repeated part of the last sentence twice. It kind of ruined it for me because i had to go back and re-read the sentence which kind of just broke the flow for me. But i loved it. And i hope that you update your main story soon.
P.S. It didn't really ruin it it just was kinda annoying(?) I can't think of the word im looking for.
| Krowhop 6/30/10 . chapter 2
Something about the way you write causes such great imagery for me! Which, in most cases, is great! I mention it though, because with your 'bugs bunny theme music' at the end... I literally hummed it out loud, while at work, lol! And after that scene...it just did NOT fit, heh. Anyway, great job, and I hope to see you update the main story soon! *lots of loves and glomps for your awesomeness*
| Krowhop 6/29/10 . chapter 1
I remembered that you had this other story here too! So, I figured I would read more of my favorite couple while I waited for you to update the main story! I love it.. though feel kinda bad cause I am reading it while at work. LOL..oh well! XD
| Natural and fake beauty 6/21/10 . chapter 2
| Natural and fake beauty 6/21/10 . chapter 1
| Poptart Guava King 2/3/10 . chapter 2
lmao after that last line, i suddenly thought
"and then POP! came the baby! :D" I felt awkward after that. :P
| Esquirella 11/12/09 . chapter 2
Very, very hot!
| HideAndGoSeek 11/12/09 . chapter 2
That was amazing
that's all that needs to be said. When you get AC published, you should add that in to the story. Before the kidnapping.