|Reviews for Innocent Intentions|
| RokitToMars 5/4/10 . chapter 7
I am Sad about the door rule...does that make me a perv?
| RokitToMars 5/4/10 . chapter 5
So I'm giving my sis running commentary of this.
Her: Was the sex intense.
Her: Your boner's showing.
thought you'd like that nugget in this sexy review.
(Ftr, I'm a girl...)
| RokitToMars 5/4/10 . chapter 3
Ahahahahaha, the beginning was great!
Four hundred guys XD
| RokitToMars 5/4/10 . chapter 2
Aw aw aw!
I want one!
oh, you're a really good writer, you know that.
You eased from one shot to story really well.
Plus, I don't know, you have a tone that works well for me.
Am I crazy? Yeah, I thought so.
| RokitToMars 5/4/10 . chapter 1
Ahaha, aw. This was kinda cute in a weird way.
| Dark Angel's Blue Fire 5/2/10 . chapter 24
Hey hey loved the new chapters I really love cole and jeremy thanks for sharing x
| Grim-Reaper21 4/30/10 . chapter 24
I thought it was funny how Cole was all like before they become in-laws and Jeremy was all like huh then Cole changed the subject. I thought Jeremy's parents would do something embarassing. It was good.
| Sheepie 4/29/10 . chapter 24
I like this story. It's like a guilty pleasure. It's very sweet and Jeremy and Cole are absolutely adorable together. I like that Cole doesn't have the perfect family. I did find some issues with the story though. There were a few minor grammatical errors and spelling issues, but my real problem was your inconsistency with time and relevance. I saw in an Author Note or a review response that you didn't have a time frame really set up, but that makes it confusing for the reader. After the first chapter you did a two month time skip, then you shot back down to two weeks (or something around there), and then down to a week. And you kept going back and forth from what I'm assuming was past and present with the chapters. Flash backs or something. It made it hard to follow the story.
If you set a solid time line it'll make it easier for the reader to understand what is going on as well as make the story more enjoyable. There were several times when I was scratching my head, kind of going, 'huh?'. If there was a solid time frame it would also make it easier for you to find a solid plot. Right now the story is sweet (and it is really good) but I don't get the feel of a plot to it. Its like several minor plot arcs thrown together that can vary from chapter to chapter. So far I haven't seen a real problem or struggle that the characters have been working towards. Every issue that presents its self is usually resolved by the end of the chapter. The story could become more intriguing if you found something for your characters to work towards. Seeing as Devon (and Jamie maybe?) is the main antagonist, you might want to work him into the story again. You actually might have something in mind seeing as how you just recently brought him back with Jamie (I loved that! Didn't see that coming!), so I can't wait to see that!
Those were my two biggest beefs with the story. Other then that everything was great. I love reading about Jeremy and Cole together and I love how violent Sam is. I think she's my favorite! Great job and update soon!
| BigBrother 4/29/10 . chapter 24
YAY! The parents finally meet :D I thought there would be a plot twist or something though. I mean with the "what are the chances your parents would have a problem with us dating after they meet my parents" deal. Nice chapter though, overall, I mean. You've defs earned a bookmark tab to your stories, though :) I kinda wish there will be more surprising events or some more about the characters in the future!
| Natural and fake beauty 4/27/10 . chapter 14
random sex on the bdays you forget is nice.
| Turquoise-Haired Mage 4/27/10 . chapter 24
Such a sweet chapter i can't wait till the next one. and continuing from my last review i really think the college thing is a good idea but then I'd ask to see a marriage scene too but its your story so it's up to you.
| JinniG 4/26/10 . chapter 24
The text messages were sweet :)
| James Stanley 4/26/10 . chapter 24
That was a really sweet chapter, I liked it. A nice way to start this icky, rainy Monday morning and keep it from slowly munching away at my soul for breakfast, lol. Your conversations are exceptionally crafted, even gramatically, you're lightyears ahead of me as far as that goes so good for you :) honestly no negative comments on this chapter save a few spelling errors, which can be excused considering the hour. Thanks taylor.
| lawannab 4/26/10 . chapter 24
The dreaded parents meeting. It wasn't too bad. I've decided that I really don't like Cole's dad. His mom, bless her bones, is too clueless but she does eventually get it.
| Phantom Rottweiler 4/21/10 . chapter 23
It was pleasantly nice to see a little bit of a slower chapter where the three of 'em are just hanging out and having fun.
What really made me giggle was when Sam said "I better not look back there and see you giving him a ** later," referring to Jer resting on Cole's lap.
I wonder how bad is sunburn was and if they'll deal with it or not.