I love the story this piece tells. It's not something you see a lot on FP and I think you pulled it off well. The last stanza was chilling but beautiful.

Good job and good luck in WCC!

Lovely. I really liked how you wrote this. It had a soft, jilting melody to it that fit perfectly and I liked the abrupt flow as well. Also, that ending was fantastic. I can feel all the subtle melancholy behind it. Nicely done.

I actually quite liked this since I do have a partialness to abstract images and metaphors. It's a nice way to lead the reader into interpreting what the words mean. Good job!

Sweet work! I think the transition between the last paragraph and the line before it was a bit choppy but whatever, that's just my opinion. Otherwise, keep it up!