|Reviews for First date|
| josieposie 11/25/09 . chapter 1
Great start, can't wait for the next update. Update soon... Love it so far...
| 008 11/25/09 . chapter 1
I see you're annoyed that you aren't getting many reviews and maybe not many hits (hard to say)... putting the whole twilight thing in your summary to get a hit isn't the way to go.
Your story is it's own thing, write a fitting summary for it. Your characters have intense personalities, especially Alex... judging by her dialogue.
You switch tenses quite a bit in this, pick one and stick with it. I also suggest you look up the proper way to write dialogue.
But in any case, this isn't bad at all. Keep on writing.