Great start, can't wait for the next update. Update soon... Love it so far...

Aye yo,

I see you're annoyed that you aren't getting many reviews and maybe not many hits (hard to say)... putting the whole twilight thing in your summary to get a hit isn't the way to go.

Your story is it's own thing, write a fitting summary for it. Your characters have intense personalities, especially Alex... judging by her dialogue.

You switch tenses quite a bit in this, pick one and stick with it. I also suggest you look up the proper way to write dialogue.

But in any case, this isn't bad at all. Keep on writing.