Names of ships are italized.

They stood in companiable silence like that for a while, talking about the goings on of the ship If they're standing in silence, how are they also talking?

Watch out for the helpful writing program. It will attempt to capitalize inappropriate words: “John,” The dark eyed sailor said. Don't let it.

as soon as everything went black... a legendary fish known as the relicoth emerges once thought to be extinct long ago shines it's ancient fins at the sailors and makes its way

*all the females peer over to take a look and cabin boy Z takes a surprise look of his own*

thus continues the story of the rune_ship with women, sailors, the foreigner, and Z the cabin boy

Uh.. Kali. Great story beginning. You could have added a bit more length to it. Oh Loved the chara names, very uhm unique. Over all I liked it. :3 keep up teh good work

not bad :]