''Standing still is the correct and roborant move'' I especially liked that but this whole piece is wonderful. Keep it Up!

Not exactly an uplifting pep talk for falling in love, but you give me pause to think. "Time flies by with her broken Wing..." I like that line, and "...your heartbroken shadow."

I like the balance of sentiments here. Some morbidity.. But seems loving enough :)

Really good. Love the title, love the work, a sentiment I haven't seen expressed very often.

Fall's lonely days

Drop into points

Filling no voids;

Making no lines

Where words would wince

To make heart's space;

Is time soul's mark

In second's felt

To mark life's pace?

p.s. OK,— it's winter here & it's not winter there, but that's life.

I like this poem as I found it thought provoking. I love the last two lines 'To make but I've had enough, Of your heartbroken shadow.' I think that they paint a good image for the reader. Good job!

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