|Reviews for Blurry Shining Winter|
| Lady Seratopia 12/19/12 . chapter 1
You have a very lyrical writing style; it helps you be versatile. Keep it up! -
| Escape16 7/2/12 . chapter 1
This poem just sparked something... I don't even know what that is! Amazing job!
| blueagle246 7/2/12 . chapter 1
beautifully written poem!
| Camilleta 1/6/12 . chapter 1
Aw.. LOVE this!
| DianaLapin 5/26/11 . chapter 1
this is good. i like the part about love reborn instead of dying away. it reminds me of my girlfriend somehow.
| Nahaylem 5/4/11 . chapter 1
Went to return the favor. Quite the intimidating number. Anyway- there should be a comma after shivering, and probably after blurry as well. I don't believe there needs to be a comma after kisses, but I'm not sure because the line after it was a bit confusing.
Good subject matter though.
| classic violet 4/12/11 . chapter 1
I love the title. Lovely, really romantic, a real deep passionate love revoked with hope within someone thanks to another person that they truly care for. Powerful. Wonderful job.
| lael1bologna 1/8/11 . chapter 1
oh, i love it!
| rust phoenix 12/22/10 . chapter 1
Beautiful poem. You describe the feeling perfectly. I love the words you use, and I think it is really cool that even though english is not your first language, you can still write amazing poems in it.
| Llandaryn 12/8/10 . chapter 1
A lovely sentiment and warm message - just what's needed on a cold winter day. Well done.
| ErdbeerePop 12/6/10 . chapter 1
I really enjoyed the concept of this.
I can tell it's translated from another language, because it's a bit choppy and the structure of the phrases is a bit off.
But still, it's a good poem.
I'd love to read it in Spanish.
| K. Molle 12/6/10 . chapter 1
I was feel the warmth coming from this, it gives me a safe and loving feeling while reading. I do have a couple suggestions to make however.
Your words that flow through my veins,
they always get to touch a piece of me.
That's why I keep shivering not cause of
the cold of this blurry shining winter.
Your warm arms and furtive kisses,
make me to be aware about love
that's reborn instead of dying away.
I would say:
You words flow through my veins,
they always touch a piece of me.
I keep shivering because of
the this blurry shining winter.
Your warm arms and furtive kisses
make me aware of me love;
rebourn instead of dying away.
You should feel proud of your piece, and keep writing. Thank you for the review, and I hope you found this helpful.
| InkyPink 12/4/10 . chapter 1
Pretty! Happy Christmas!
| thrivingivory852 12/3/10 . chapter 1
This is beautiful. 'Nuff said.
| The lone canine 12/3/10 . chapter 1
This is very good and it is well written. Nice theme, and great job!