Very intense. I love the way the two characters complement each other-pushing each other farther from reality. At least, that's how it seems to me. The line "I’ve got a full bottle of pills and you’ve got the ambition I’ve been lacking" kind of says it all. It's also my favorite line. Great work.

I love the opening stanza the best - the imagery is so genuine and well-described. :)

I feel the same way at times.

I love how descriptive you are! My favorite part:

"You told me

you love me and the words dripped down on me

like watercolor, staining me in shades of

forget-me-not and solemn promise."

Brilliant! Don't ever stop writing!