|Reviews for Short and Sweet|
| Lady Livia 12/30/09 . chapter 4
This is true.
No matter how close you get to someone... they will still have that sense of ... other.
But not having someone like that feels even worse.
| Punslinger 12/29/09 . chapter 5
Small wings but big talent. Reminds me of the bumblebee. The laws of physics say its wings are too small to lift its body. But the bumblebee never studied physics, so it just goes on flying.
| SirScott 12/29/09 . chapter 5
I like the one that says you can find someone exactly like you and still be alone. Until I had a fictionpress account I had never read a Haiku, but now I've read thousands of them. Your style has improved.
| Mirabella 12/29/09 . chapter 4
I like hoe 'feels' can be taken 2 different ways: 1) feel a in touch, and 2) feel as in emotions. :) So it adds 2 senses, as it were. :)
Thi one remind me of everyone, as you know, i wonder if true love really exists. :)
| Mirabella 12/29/09 . chapter 5
Beautiful idea! Seems to be about wanting and waiting for freedom. :)
I LOVE it. :)
| painted eyes 12/29/09 . chapter 1
This is really good! The way you simply described the process of a birthday just left me with streams of imagination at that final line. Good job on this!
| Princess-anna57 12/29/09 . chapter 5
Aw, quite a bittersweet haiku! :( But great! Keep at it!
| Princess-anna57 12/29/09 . chapter 4
Very true unfortunately. Great haiku! Keep writing!
| Punslinger 12/28/09 . chapter 4
This is a profound thought well expressed in the haiku form.
| Isca 12/22/09 . chapter 3
Oh, this is rather macabre. I like it. The opening line, "He commands the dark," is particularly stunning. :)
| I see London I see Sam's Town 12/21/09 . chapter 3
I tend to avoid forms like the Haiku and Senryu because I'm not very good at them, haha xP But just a suggestion for your third one:
"yearning for an escape, and/but"
Getting rid of that hyphen and replacing it with a comma, followed by either "but" or "and" (depending on how you want it read), would remove that awkward glitch the hyphen creates.
Happy writing (:
| May Elizabeth 12/19/09 . chapter 3
Beautiful. Haunting. Love it.
| May Elizabeth 12/19/09 . chapter 2
I liked the imagery this presented to me. Great work.
| May Elizabeth 12/19/09 . chapter 1
I really liked this haiku. The image was nice. And cake. :D
| Saurosuchus 12/18/09 . chapter 3
this was is my favorite of the trio, I would say.
very captivating imagery and depth. nice job.