|Reviews for Beauty and the Vampire|
| alexandra101 6/15/11 . chapter 11
| happinie93 11/26/10 . chapter 3
And I just realized that you've included beauty and the beast. You know I can be so VERY VERY blind sometimes.
| happinie93 11/26/10 . chapter 1
I have read through this story before and I think I might have commented but I just realized after I had watched beauty and the beast that this story really reminded me of that. And I still love this story this is going to be my second time reading this.
| Abrasive 9/6/10 . chapter 22
What attracted me to this story was the premise - you gave a new and interesting twist to the tale of 'Beauty & the Beast' and I was really excited to read it. However, your writing wasn't quite strong enough to uphold it:
Firstly, you should look into getting a beta, since there is a litany of spelling/grammar mistakes.
Although there is some good description of setting, the story lacked depth, particularly in the earlier chapters and with regards to emotions/intentions. More deatil is required, especially since you tend to gloss over certain scenes when just a few more lines would make it much better.
This brings me to my third issue with your writing: Characterisation. I couldn't get a clear vision of what type of characters Audery and Desmond were, you seemed to backflip over their personalities and their intentions. Audery was particularly bad - she was, unfortunately, a Mary-Sue, which sucked a lot of the fun out of reading your story.
To recap: Wonderful idea, but the execution needs a lot of improvement.
| LostarielHarris 8/12/10 . chapter 22
It was awesome xx
| Cwzvil92 5/15/10 . chapter 21
Awesome ending. So happy it ended happily. Was afraid Desmond would die and then Audrey would kill herself. So many stories now a days have sad endings. So happy this one came out well.
| xJadeRainx 5/13/10 . chapter 21
Wow, I love happy endings! Such a great story, too! The ending was a nice, unexpected twist as well.
And NO don't even THINK about changing the story to let Anthony take Audery hostage! Haha!
| fullybooked 5/13/10 . chapter 21
I love It!
It's one of the best stories I have ever read
| Cwzvil92 5/12/10 . chapter 20
Cant wait 4 the last chapter. Chapter 20 kept me engaged from the start to the finish. I secretly don't want Desmond to die but your the author so thats all up to you. I didn't see any grammar errors while reading so that was perfect. Hope you keep writing.
| xJadeRainx 5/11/10 . chapter 20
Well, that was terrifying!
Anthony has been dealt with accordingly, and now Audery must deal with the mess that was left behind. There must be a heck of a lot of blood. *Winces* I'd be more frightened for Desmond's life, but as I've said before... good guys always win!
I can't wait to read the final chapter!
| Secret-Stillness 5/9/10 . chapter 20
WOO ALMOST DONE AND WELL WRITTEN YAY!I love love love LOVE audrey
| fullybooked 5/9/10 . chapter 20
That was so sad, really!
| xJadeRainx 4/30/10 . chapter 19
Oh, please that little twerp Anthony doesn't stand a chance against Desmond! Besides, good guys always win!
| xJadeRainx 4/30/10 . chapter 18
Oh, man, Audery is free now. She can go home and she her father, save him from the true beasts (the villagers) and then go back to Desmond!
| xJadeRainx 4/30/10 . chapter 14
Hmm, Aduery sure seems comfortable in Desmond's bed, doesn't she? And Paul didn't seem at all fazed to see the two together like that. And Thane is like a big puppy!
I like the library parallel to the film.