I hadn't felt more like a human in ages.

- maybe just I hadn't felt more human in ages?

hehe, I'm thinking Cody is liking Sarah! He's quite a nice guy methinks!

The premise was that he was going to see the rest of his family, but we both knew that was a lie. He was going to get help, or at least try to.

- uh-oh, that ain't gonna work!

And, mirrors! Doesn't Belle hate mirrors? this is gonna be awesome!

Also, if the crowd loves Sarah and Cashmere, then Belle can't exactly kill them coz they'll find out something's wrong! :D

Narq.

yikes! I love how everything is working together! So cool!

Poor Jim, but I guess it's good that Belle didn't have to kill him. :phew:

and I love how Sarah and Jospeh and (tony?) are working together!

Narq.

Yikes, an exciting chapter indeed!

My name and my eyes. They were still mine, at least.

- love this, but Joseph, the tiger body is yours too, and you can do lots with it that you can't with your human one!

I think Sarah might just get our Joseph back to human form again! Wait, Joseph is an adult and Sarah is a kid, right? So no chance of romance there..

eh, don't worry, I like it as it is! :D

Narq.

Brutus and Caesar. They were brothers. I bet the irony was lost to your average Joe coming to see the circus.

- haha, I love how there's so many layers of meanings here! Like, a) you're hinting that our Joseph is an educated guy b) you're reminding the reader but at the same time poking fun at us (if said reader didn't get it the first time).

LOvely chapter! Must read on!

Narq.

:sigh: pure bliss.

I could find any typos or nothing. The grammar (I thought) was perfect!

Sorry for hte lack of reviewness in here, coz I'm simply enthralled by this story and intend to review/read as much as possible of it!

Narq.

I really like the description in the opening paragraph and throughout the chapter. I didn’t notice any grammatical errors. The plot also seems interesting and I like how you portrayed Joseph.

“"Adam. Adam Jefferson," I said. My name is Joseph Baxton.” –I thought this line was funny.

I don’t really have any criticism . Keep writing!

That was another interesting and intense chapter. I only encountered one spelling error. You had; "Tail lashing, by eyes narrowed into slits." Where I think "by" should be "my". It was a great chapter. The elephant, who I believe is Tony, came in but then vanished. And then he goes after Belle, who after being cornered by the law, is now doing something to Joseph. I look forward to reading the next chapter, keep up the good writing.

That was an interesting chapter, it was intense. It was a well written chapter, I didn't encounter any spelling or grammar errors. It was sad how Catherine reacted to Tony after their fight, I wonder what happened to him. And now the tent is on fire. Keep up the good writing, I look forward to reading more.

I love Belle. I love how her sense of bitter humour... The way she uses magic is interesting. You can tell shes really good at it. I do wonder how she's meant to be beaten, since shes such a good villain and all...

Aah. I wouldnt scream at Belle if I were Tony... Yep. He's gone. I knew she'd shut him up. You never shout at a villain! That's like asking to be killed! Stupid man.

Anyway, it was nice to be in Belle's perspective on this chapter! Update soon! :D

RH

The relationship between Sarah and Joseph/Casimiro is so sweet... She's such a nice person to him, and its very clear that he trusts her back. I'd love to see Joseph as a human... I think he's been a tiger for too long... I mean, he has an awesome persoanlity, and I'd love for him to have a real conversation with Sarah. One where he can actually talk back...

Anyway, great chapter! Filled with action and great dialogue!

RH

This story really lives up to its' genre- it's humorous and mysterious. Like, at the end of this chapter for instance. I wasn't really sure what you meant, so I glimpsed at Chapter 2 to find out what it meant.

It's very cool that you are writing from different characters' perspective. It would get very boring if there was only one point of view.

A problem I noticed was this line:

"A dilemma, sir?" I asked, my voice even. "I don't understand what you're talking about."

"Oh, please." Belle rolled her eyes. "Don't pretend you haven't seen—"

He says "sir", but then it calls Belle a "her".

It was kinda confusing.

Overall, good story, but some parts could be explained less or more. (Like, how did he know about the train in the first place?)

I wasn't sure how I'd feel about the switching POVs, but I have to say that I like it so far. I definitely like that the reader will get more of the full picture this way, but it's still up to you to answer whatever mysteries they put in front of them. Very cool.

I have to say you portrayed Sarah and Jim's relationship very well in between these two chapters. I thought the same as Joseph when you first introduced them, to be honest. But good job on the switch and ironing things out for real.

In the middle or this chapter, there's a part after the parentheses that's missing a spot of punctuation.

I really liked this chapter, it flowed really nicely and intensified the plot with ease. Very solid, nice work.

Happy Holidays!

-SS

I found this to be a really effective first chapter. It was really well set up, informing enough about the protangonist for the story to make sense, but not so much that it was just a block of background information. The twist at the end was good in giving it enough of a cliffhanger to make a reader continue reading, but not with so much drama that it was just overkill.

I liked the sense of balance you were able to find in this chapter.

I really liked the use of vocabulary, particularly in describing things. I felt it gave the story a lot more depth than if you had only used typical adjectives.

Eg. it made a respectable thunk as it hit the wood

One thing I found really great about the chapter is the underlying theme of 'Nothing Is Ever As It Seems'. When I first read the line, I almost dismissed it, not believing it to be terribly important. But after reading over the chapter a few times I noticed it popped up in quite a few parts of the chapter. It was especially prominent in the ringmasters various forms.

On the subject of the ringmaster, the way you used the mirrors in the carriage to describe the change from female to male was really creative and I thought was a great idea!

I can't really find much to criticize about this chapter. So thanks for the good read, and keep up the great work!

Merry Christmas :)