I like it a lot ] Very well written. I like the mystery it leaves ] There's so much that you don't know, and it just draws you in.

it's a good start! but like you said, it is a bit difficult to read due to so much detail. also, noticed one small thing, it's smoke, not smog. but that's just a small thing. aside from that, looking forward to reading the next chapter.

I really like this so far. Can't wait to read more.