O.o Needs more detail on chapters 1- 4. I would careful using "I" at the beginning of the sentence too many times as well. I enjoyed reading it, and the fifth chapter was very... uh, yeah. Good job, now will there be more chapters in the future?

I have to say that they are a very fast couple. Like yesterday they just had their first kiss and now they're having sex. That's a bit fast but in if you respond to this can you tell me how they met and all that stuff btw in the song "the take over, the breaks over" by fall out boy the guy singing says secwet instead of secret.

AWESOME! No more comment. Are you planning on making this story short by the way?

Love crazy alright! Hehe! I loved it! Is she japanese? Or is this all american and stuff. Thank you in advance.

Wow...Twilight fan much?

yes it is cant wait till nxt chapter