This. Is a wonderfully written piece. Sometimes it gets lost in itself but the overall story drags the reader in. It's very very unique, and I really just want to thank you for writing it, even if it's not finished.

This story is one of the most disturbing I've ever read. It's like a pileup on the interstate: I know I should look away, because it's definitely going to get worse. But it's too morbidly enticing to look away from.

You are amazing. Period. So I read Mise En Place and With Intent (Still haven't gotten around to Cold Turkey, no), and now I read this. And I am officially in love with this story. Just saying.

/moseys off/

I'm british, I see your british. Its prettey obvious... but I think you may be trying to hard? it is difficult for a british person to read this with a straight face... full of cliches and phrases... I have no real clue whats goin on and no offense, I usually really like your work but you're trying too hard, just a little. This story is ALL over the place... trying too hard to be hard... honestly, no offense meant, you're a good writer. Just a heads up.

Beautiful as always. I'm really starting to get a feel for the plot.

So you're not updating as often as you used to. So what? Life gets in the way and you're still a better updater than the vast majority of good writers on this site.

Keep going at a pace that works for you. I'm good at patient.

The flow of your writing is completly different here than in other stories but I like it. You have to think a bit more ;)

Tina

I sense we've come to a new part of the story and I'm wondering where you're going next.

You are a very talented writer. I've read all 4 chapters concurrently and I'm blown away by the way you are able to paint such a vivid picture of the city's bleak environment and the inhabitants desperate belief that they can get out - all with so few words.

Hope you keep updating this one.

Fantastic as always. I see that it's quite different from VL, but then I didn't really think that it wouldn't be. It's much darker. I feel like it's probably a lot more realistic.

Probably better written, but definitely just as addictive.

I heart you Zebbie. Thank you for being so awesome.

All things with boxers are going to inevitably remind me somewhat of Verbotene Liebe, but this does especially because it's rough to be a little guy who can't get the big names to fight him.

This note is a little less about this particular piece (though certainly including it) and more about how much I love your writing style in general. You're living proof that there is more than one way an author can use a different voice and still write something brilliant. Good luck with your publishing company. If anyone can do it, it's probably you.

It's somber and depressing. I could see that in a movie, rain, somber building, rooms with dirty walls and almost no furniture and the tired characters with dark circle under their eyes. It's somewhat hard to understand at times though and really angsty, even for my tastes.

I thought I reviewed this one when I first read it, but I must've forgoten to do it. I like how it's set in a real world, not in a happy go lucky one. And I also really like the last sentence, that one tells us so little and so much at the same time!

Tina

I'm so happy to see you updating this one. I was intrigued by the first chapter but with chapters two & three I have a better feel of how you're going to proceed and I'm pretty sure it's going to be another favourite for me.

I already like Stuart and his friend and after three chapters you have me emotionally invested. I didn't expect to like a drug dealer but surprisingly I do. Already I'm worried about him;

Thinking things like, what if he gets caught or loses his job? How would he get the drugs? If he couldn't supply Stuart would that impact their relationship?

This story has the same feel of bleak dispair and desperate hope as Mise en Place which is one of my favourites. Your stories just ensnare me and this one is shaping up to be another one that I'm constantly checking for updates on.

Loved it. Your charaters have such depth to them; you're a brilliant writer. I've always been meening to comment on your stories but I get lazy.

I've read 'Mise en Place' three times now (more if you count the rereading of my favourite parts). Every time I come to see if there's an update I end up rereading the whole thing again.

well, keep up the good work. I look foward to your next update.

I love how fresh your stories always are. This new approach is great and your writing is as bold and lyrical as ever.

The tone of this story is very melancholy, tinged with hope. Perhaps there will be a second part?