This is so random hahahah. But somehow, made more sense than I thought it would.

Sweet- the ending.

Interesting- the beginning

Confusing- the middle...

I honestly don't think this piece is as bad as you said it is.

Everyone else seemed like they could exist in real life. Matt's response to Becky's greeting sounded a little awkward (even if he was supposed to sound silly), but that's a minor detail.

I hope I read more from you soon. )

That's pretty original.

I was feeling pretty down about this guy's life, wondering if he would blow up anywhere.

And then when he arrived home to 'Becky' and drew out the Avenue Q ticket's, I'm all: "IT SUCKS TO BE YOU!" song chorus running through my head. But hey, if he's got some good lookin' lady-wife, and a cook then life's (probably) all worth it.

You made my day a little brighter with the hilariousness of your story.

Thanks for bringing it to fictionpress. :P

Okay, just want to say, I adored this. I like his carpool gang, and how you portrayed their characters. I so know a girl like the germophobe (she has to use anti-bactieral hand shit every time she touches something someone else handed to her). I've also totally had customers like Felix the Fucktart.

Some of the dialogue was a bit stilted, but nothing really bad or completely unrealistic. But that comes with practice. People say you should listen to people talk to get realistic dialogue, but really most dialogue in movies and books are how people would WISH they could talk.

The last line is awesome.