Wow, very deep. I like the commit part. You did a good job with the expressions. They are powerful.

You can write.

Wow this is really interesting :) I like the language you use and your style of writing - its a great concept, how the character is questioning herself in such a way. And the oxymoron sentence is cool - it made me go back, reread it, and go, oh. :] Clever! I'm really intrigued and will be looking forward to reading more about this perfect world!