"I may sound selfish

But this is my fairy tale" - my favourite part. :)

Nicely done.

Haha, a personal wonderland, very nice. However, there was a lot of incorrect grammar, such as wear, and defiantly, in which i assume you meant where and definitley. But i see that you threw this together in 10 minutes, so not bad _

I really like this piece because it resembled Alice in Wonderland, which is a favourite of mine. Also, I think you represented the queen's character very well.

Your flow was a bit rough at the beginning, but you did smooth it out a bit once you got towards the end.

Despite that, this piece was still a very enjoyable read.

I like the idea of this poem, but I think it could have been executed better. The rhyming was a little bit off for me, and the variety in sentence length made it hard to catch the flow of this piece. I think this has the potential to be a really interesting and creative piece, but I think it needs a little more work first. :]

Thank you for doing this, I have to accept your challenge now, xD.