|Reviews for self mutilation|
| Lenora1854 6/16/10 . chapter 1
It's good. I like the theme. Your ideas are spot-on, your thought and theme, which is the basis of all good poetry, is perfect.
The only thing I might change is thw writing. It feels a little detached. It lacks the decadence and drama, the near-nostalgic terror, that should envelope a poem like this to make it work to its potential.
But that's hard. Especially with poetry. I know.
If you really want to edit it, you can try adding some more figurative language. Original yet dramatic. Don't fall to cliche, but don't be afraid to be melodramatic. Afterall, self mutilation is pretty dramatic.
But I really liked it. :)