| Reviews for ALIEN AMNESIAC |
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Guess who 1/31/13 . chapter 1 Nothing happens for a long long while, then someone whom you have never met, perhaps that you find online. Intuits that you have received through your space friends a time released implant, designed to release your full potential, and allow you to be a conduit of an advanced energy necessary for survival on the planet. At a certain age, say 65, after you have had a normal life, being a householder and raising children, The implant is activated ( make it occur around 12-21-12, and then, your life changes radically in ways you never thought possible. You become emboldened, knowing that you have mission and purpose. The aliens, knowing you were a nerd, and a sciencefiction freak unleash the visionary scientist within you, and you become new Tesla, minus the government harassment. How about that one? |
Lain Alastair 2/3/10 . chapter 1Great story, please update soon! -Lain :] |
vixenia 1/28/10 . chapter 2Well okay this chapter definitely explains why the character didn't have a name in the first chapter. A good idea though is to try and show the characteristics of the character though. So having the doctors show what he looks like in a mirror and describing it is always a great way to represent your character. Great chappie by the way! |
vixenia 1/28/10 . chapter 1I really like the idea behind it. Using more visual details is always a good way to add juice and length to your story. So when the main character is waking up, try to add as much detail to his/her surroundings as possible, as well as the people. Also, its always a good idea to introduce your main characters name in the first chapter. |
Arv 1/19/10 . chapter 1 An interesting start. Could develop into something really interesting. Lack of capitalization of "i" is strange, but maybe that is related to later development of the story line...? Keep it going. I want to see where this leads. |