wow really good i like that myth. good rythm

I love poetry about the old Gods, This is beautifully written!

I will definatly have to look over the rest of your works, I am very impressed!

-William

The words have been strung beautifully...

Keep writing.

-Rippling Ebbulience

Bravo! A virtuoso performance on a single rhyme theme. I think the only word you missed was "thighs."

I think you told the story well. However The rhyming seems a bit forced.

Cool! Great story. What comes to mind is that line from the Bard's Hamlet "Murder most foul" (and I really hope that's Hamlet and not MacBeth)